This is a pretty interesting piece with the dual screen action. The Barbies for me kept the dialog interesting but for the most part however I didn't get a connection with the use of Barbies rather than real actors, maybe it is for a we are modeled after the Creator thing? That leaves me with questions. Again I think the scene being played out with the photoshop along side without the dialog Barbies switch the perspective over to the parent's side of the conversation. In my opinion I think the other side of the dialog wasn't really needed but I almost want to hear the other side of the conversation. The audio on the father came in a bit low as opposed to the mother. Overall it was okay but it wasn't my bag of tea.
Criticism- I think it would would help if you had the voice of the person on the other side of the phone so that the viewer has a deeper understanding or connection with the girls problems, about not not giving up easily. The technical things I caught was that to be sure your dual screens stay consistently the same size and watch how you cut in and out.
Positives- I'm happy about the entrance and how you brought the viewer into the show. Also, the camera angles really helped to push your show. The voice of the lady is really motherly which helps this situation.
I enjoy the double screen because it works well to show two different perspectives. The audio works well and because you never say anything, it seems as though the speaker(your Mom) is talking to the viewer. I think the beginning is a little confusing, are you suppose to be showing how you are put on a pedestal or something like that? That last shot bothers me a little, I would like to see her ride off further.
I think that you have some really compelling footage here, but it is fragmented. I love the image of the dollhouse in the field. You could play that up more so that you do not have to keep showing the doll of your mother bouncing up and down in the same shoot.
There was also a section when the footage of your mother went black, was that intentional? If so, I was distracted by it.
I like the first scene but I am not quite sure what it has to do with the art school and the difficulties that you were having with Photoshop.
I feel like there is something missing between when you are talking to your mother and when you are driving that hot pink jeep.
I was slightly confused about your get up that was supposed to be the phone. I guess its a little odd that it just sticks to the wall. I love the barbie theme, I just wish that there was more interactions between different characters. The ending is a little confusing to me . I'm not sure where she is supposed to be driving or heading to. The computer errors on the right hand side are cool at first, but begin to feel a little distractive. I do love the father stepping in, the voice you chose for him is great. Keep at it, i shall await the final project.
The dialog is interesting but I don't feel like the voice is coming from the doll. Maybe they could be holding the phone. What happened to the other scenes that were going to be in it?
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This is a pretty interesting piece with the dual screen action. The Barbies for me kept the dialog interesting but for the most part however I didn't get a connection with the use of Barbies rather than real actors, maybe it is for a we are modeled after the Creator thing? That leaves me with questions. Again I think the scene being played out with the photoshop along side without the dialog Barbies switch the perspective over to the parent's side of the conversation. In my opinion I think the other side of the dialog wasn't really needed but I almost want to hear the other side of the conversation. The audio on the father came in a bit low as opposed to the mother. Overall it was okay but it wasn't my bag of tea.
Criticism- I think it would would help if you had the voice of the person on the other side of the phone so that the viewer has a deeper understanding or connection with the girls problems, about not not giving up easily. The technical things I caught was that to be sure your dual screens stay consistently the same size and watch how you cut in and out.
Positives- I'm happy about the entrance and how you brought the viewer into the show. Also, the camera angles really helped to push your show. The voice of the lady is really motherly which helps this situation.
I enjoy the double screen because it works well to show two different perspectives. The audio works well and because you never say anything, it seems as though the speaker(your Mom) is talking to the viewer. I think the beginning is a little confusing, are you suppose to be showing how you are put on a pedestal or something like that? That last shot bothers me a little, I would like to see her ride off further.
I think that you have some really compelling footage here, but it is fragmented.
I love the image of the dollhouse in the field. You could play that up more so that you do not have to keep showing the doll of your mother bouncing up and down in the same shoot.
There was also a section when the footage of your mother went black, was that intentional? If so, I was distracted by it.
I like the first scene but I am not quite sure what it has to do with the art school and the difficulties that you were having with Photoshop.
I feel like there is something missing between when you are talking to your mother and when you are driving that hot pink jeep.
I was slightly confused about your get up that was supposed to be the phone. I guess its a little odd that it just sticks to the wall. I love the barbie theme, I just wish that there was more interactions between different characters. The ending is a little confusing to me . I'm not sure where she is supposed to be driving or heading to. The computer errors on the right hand side are cool at first, but begin to feel a little distractive. I do love the father stepping in, the voice you chose for him is great. Keep at it, i shall await the final project.
The dialog is interesting but I don't feel like the voice is coming from the doll. Maybe they could be holding the phone. What happened to the other scenes that were going to be in it?
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